This is my retell of Lake Ora. The day before we did this writing we did a picture dictation, it is where you rule up 8 boxes and as the story is read to you you draw the key moments in each box. So when you go to write it you know what are the main events.


 One pitch black night when the moon was full the Pohe tribe was fast asleep when the sound of bubbles from Lake Ora woke the tribe. Everyone went to see what the noise was but all they saw was a big black object floating through the water. No one feared to go see what that beast was when a brave warrior looking for attention said “ It's probable the taniwha I will go to the shore and see,”. So the mighty warrior set off to the shore but when he got there it was gone.

After that the Chief's beautiful daughter was the only one how lived by the lake. Exactly a year later the tribe was woken again on full moon but this time they were woken by the scream of the chief's daughter, the same brave warrior ran to the lake as he watched the taniwha barge the woman into the lake. He had had enough of this taniwha he sprinted up to his Fahrenui  and grabbed  his spear and dived into the lake, for a hole two days and two nights, when he came up to the surface he look like a hundred year old man but he was not entirely successful on the end of his spare was a bit of the taniwha.

From that day on every full moon Lake Ora would turn bright red. And the memory the there was ounce a beautiful woman who was lost in the lake, people believe that the woman was eaten before she could be rescued. Now there is only around 12 people left in the Pohe tribe.

What I was learning to do is use picture dictation and retell the story of Lake Ora.
( Pleas say if I did that well: comments)